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My Story
« on: September 29, 2012, 11:20:28 pm »
I wrote this for my English/World Geography class for school and I wondered what you guys thaought of it. It is my only large piece of fiction I have written. My group said they liked it, but they may have just liked that I wrote the whole thing :P

http://www.booksie.com/other/short_story/ruler501/doomsday-in-dallas

Any critiques are welcome
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Re: My Story
« Reply #2 on: September 30, 2012, 02:22:02 pm »
http://i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/154/912/berneydidnotread.gif
Thats not very productive post. In omnimaga we look for good posts. you might want to consider revising it to be less spammy and more helpful
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Re: My Story
« Reply #3 on: September 30, 2012, 04:57:20 pm »
I skimmed through it. I really liked how it didn't seem to have the narrator showing any emotion. But that could also be a bad thing...


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Re: My Story
« Reply #4 on: September 30, 2012, 05:23:16 pm »
http://i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/154/912/berneydidnotread.gif
Thats not very productive post. In omnimaga we look for good posts. you might want to consider revising it to be less spammy and more helpful

Sorry I am from reddit and over there we never do anything productive. Also that gif is hilarious

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Re: My Story
« Reply #5 on: September 30, 2012, 05:28:00 pm »
It's generally best to not assume that every habit on a particular site or forum is acceptable on every others. :)


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Re: My Story
« Reply #6 on: September 30, 2012, 07:20:11 pm »
http://i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/154/912/berneydidnotread.gif
Thats not very productive post. In omnimaga we look for good posts. you might want to consider revising it to be less spammy and more helpful

Sorry I am from reddit and over there we never do anything productive. Also that gif is hilarious
If you look at your post rating you'll see that its not considered appropriate here.

I skimmed through it. I really liked how it didn't seem to have the narrator showing any emotion. But that could also be a bad thing...
Its supposed to be like an NPR broadcast which generally dont have that much emotion in the narrators
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Re: My Story
« Reply #7 on: September 30, 2012, 11:10:51 pm »
http://i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/154/912/berneydidnotread.gif
Thats not very productive post. In omnimaga we look for good posts. you might want to consider revising it to be less spammy and more helpful

Sorry I am from reddit and over there we never do anything productive. Also that gif is hilarious
I guess we're the opposite of Reddit here, so the behaviour of certain redditors as posted on Reddit might not be welcome here. (Isn't that great or not?)

Anyway. Slightly tl;dr, but it's about doomsday so it looks pretty great.

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Re: My Story
« Reply #8 on: October 01, 2012, 11:31:00 am »
http://thebeerbarrel.net/smilies/didntread.gif Care to have some chicken?

Edit: BTW this is just a joke calm down guys.
« Last Edit: October 01, 2012, 01:05:22 pm by Augs »

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Re: My Story
« Reply #9 on: October 01, 2012, 01:36:55 pm »
We are calm. We're just trying to make sure you don't get banned or something for spamming (like that one person that posted "/me lost the game" in response to every thread).

(Btw it's not a good idea to tell people to calm down and that it's a joke in response to warnings either, because that might make yourself look like you're trying to pass off innapropriate messages as joking even when it's not, in attempt to make yourself look clean and others look bad and to avoid any form of warning increase. That tactic doesn't really work as much anymore on those small forums, since it was used a few times before :P)
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Re: My Story
« Reply #10 on: October 01, 2012, 04:13:35 pm »
We're just trying to make sure you don't get banned or something for spamming (like that one person that posted "/me lost the game" in response to every thread).
Who got banned from that O.O
* yeongJIN_COOL remembers doing that a lot...
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Re: My Story
« Reply #11 on: October 01, 2012, 04:40:16 pm »
Sorry I thought you guys would have appreciated my humour. Apparently not. Terribly sorry, I am new to this place.

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Re: My Story
« Reply #12 on: October 01, 2012, 04:45:27 pm »
We're just trying to make sure you don't get banned or something for spamming (like that one person that posted "/me lost the game" in response to every thread).
Who got banned from that O.O
* yeongJIN_COOL remembers doing that a lot...
The issue was that he posted it even if no post before mentionned anything about the game or losing and he usually added absolutely nothing else to the convo. :P


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Re: My Story
« Reply #13 on: October 01, 2012, 05:47:26 pm »
Ah. A death angel who was bound to torture members by making them continuously losing the game. It make sense now.
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The title sounds fun. I'll read it some time :D
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Re: My Story
« Reply #14 on: October 01, 2012, 10:33:54 pm »
Thanks. Yeah Augs it is best to try to post things that assist the topic. And you might not want to reply to warnings with more of what you were warned about. I appreciate you are trying to be humorous, but I for one do not find it funny. I find it insulting that you would respond to my request for help and critique with something making fun of it.

Also I'll be updating it with the version we revised in class today so there are some small improvements.
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